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In the past
you were my queen
and I was your hand maiden
we had a love
that only a poet could dream
we danced behind
closed doors
I was your secret
and you were
my world
We would kiss in the rain
Take the horses for a ride
through the county side
away from your fame
In the past
you were my queen
and i was your hand maiden
we had a love
that only a poet could dream
we'd go wild in the dark
and keep it quiet in the light
for I was you secret
and you were my word
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It's lovely! Especially the opening verse/stanza.
If I'd advise anything it would be to work on the third verse, which, because it has some rhyming going on doesn't read like the rest of the poem. Something like stanza two and the last verse would be nice.
If I'd advise anything it would be to work on the third verse, which, because it has some rhyming going on doesn't read like the rest of the poem. Something like stanza two and the last verse would be nice.